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Hurry up November get here fast. Little Big Planet 3 is here at last. With 3 new friends added to Sackboys group. There's Toggle and Oddsock and a bird who's named Swoop. Brand new adventures await all us players. And best thing of all there's now 16 layers. Unlimited Thermo would make things so great. And the new tools we have give us much to create. New costumes to wear and new prizes to get. Excuse me November but are you here yet? Don't get me wrong Santa I still love December. But this year Christmas time starts for me in November.

2014-08-25 10:17:00 Author: charles--1970 Posts: 46

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Reminds me of the charming dialogue in the move pack.

2014-08-26 03:39:00 Author: ForgottenEnigma Posts: 1414

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Nice! The second line wasn't particularly smooth to read, for me. Personally, and I can only speak personally, It would have been easier if it had said "and a bird named Swoop" not "whose named"; it might just be the way I read it. Apart from that it was all good. I did enjoy the subtle use of humour, it really worked. Actually, I'll be nitpicky here: Grammatical error, second line - needs an apostrophe in "Sackboys" I'm only joking but you can take it if you want.

2014-08-26 20:05:00 Author: wally-217 Posts: 521

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The second line wasn't particularly smooth to read Alternatively, replacing the first "and" with a comma would also improve flow. There's Toggle, Oddsock and a bird who's named Swoop.

2014-08-27 03:30:00 Author: ForgottenEnigma Posts: 1414

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