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Hey Sackfolk! I'm level showcasing my level once again! in Feedback4Feedback! The Untold Story is an adventure up in the mountain of Eletzia, which is located in Africa. You find your self woken up to a devastating crash in a train, hanging of a mountain, deep in the snow. You have to find your way back, and try to remember what had happend to you, as you do not re call any thing. Embark on a journey like never before, fighting monsters, climbing mountains, swimming in the deep cave waters, travelling through jungle, and more! http://lbp.me/v/3wwjk5

2012-07-31 11:48:00 Author: Skaterjoe14 Posts: 60

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http://lbp.me/v/3wwjk5 This is the level link if anyone wants it, your welcome. And the level sounds cool but you might want one of these fancy links. I Q'd it so I'll post my review later. Okay review time.- I'm not gonna lie, this level was cheesy. The lines my Sack thing said were funny because o how badly they were written. It's not a bad thing infact it made me smile. Infact the story wasn't bad at all its mostly the spelling issues and also the fact that my sack thing was like oh I should be taking pics for the newspaper, and oh i hope my son wasn't on the train. Don't go looking for him or anything just I hope you weren't there. Anyways just the randomness of the lines made me chuckle. While playing the level it seeme perfectly fine game play wise, I only had 2 complaints. 1st that stupid Elemental thing, idk what it was supposed to look like but man did that thing take for ever to kill. I had to go get a new gun like 20 times. I can not stress enough how long it took to kill. And I will insist on you lowering its life or i will hunt you down and slap you in the face. Jk Jk but seriously lower its life, when i got to the second one i just ran right passed it I didn't even try to kill it. For my second complaint is at that part where you say i'm close to the exit an you slide down those things, goin back and forth, I don't know how i did it but i glitched it out and got on top of the things and got stuck. Luckily I got squished some how an died, otherwise i would of had to use the treaded 'pop' feature. All in all I'd give it 3 1/2 stars out of 5, if you decrease the life of the monster i would give it a 4. Idk if you'll see this but test the level in this link. https://lbpcentral.lbp-hub.com/index.php?t=72241-The-Free-Roam-Adventures-of-the-Beta-Cavern-Rpg&p=1023186#post1023186

2012-07-31 14:58:00 Author: SilverTriforce7 Posts: 183

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got it queued. You should add some pics to further entice the reader to queue your level. either edit and use the "Insert Image" icon (the little picture frame of a tree) or use image tags around your pic links. pic link I remember playing this a ways back and yet again, forgot to leave feedback. I'm at the beginning and find it fairly difficult to scale the vertical train to escape. Finally made it to the top, visuals look good but I would also add a thin piece to the front to accentuate the environment. Aaah! spikes! made it down into the caves? Crystals everywhere and hey, a gun. Again, maybe some thin material in the middle layer and the front to add in details and HOLY CRAP, a glowing thing! I must shoot it. wow, I had to shoot it a lot but it is now gone. Farewell creature from the netherworld. This section of the cave looks good. I'd add in a touch of greenery too and maybe a mushroom or two. "That whole looks big enough." HOLE it should be and misspelled tongue. LOL WUT? Man, I love this dialog. "I really need to get back to shooting more photos for the news paper." I didn't even know I was a photographer! Under the water now, um, really think it's unnecessary to have the arrows pointing at the receptacles. Really not that complicated of a puzzle. red to red, blue to blue and green to green. Door opens, slow down the fans and progressed, oh look, a dead seahorse? It's just floating there at the top of the water. A seahorse is kind of out of place here. Ok, jumped out of the water and the water drains? HA! love this dialog here: Geez, I forgot if my son came with me on this trip. Hopefully not. Hilarious. I didn't see anyone else on the train with me so maybe the son didn't come after all. funny of him to forget that, but I guess a traumatic thing like a train crash, may do that to a person. I like sliding down these shoots, they're neat and designed well. I just think there are too many of them. Hmm, crash to the bottom and move along, Ah! a survivor. he tells me everyone is dead, eatin' or froze. I forgot to ask about my son before he himself died. Oh well, grab a gun and here's another plasma creature. wasted him after a million shots it seems like. moving on and another series of slides. this one is trickier as there are electric hazards along the way and the camera is at an angle that kind of makes it hard to see, but I made it with only one death. to the bottom and another gem of dialog. Huh! Now I remember. M'...my, son...died on that train reck, I remember clearly now, that we fell off the train tracks, and fell..fell way down onto the top of a mountain and I remember him falling out He doesn't seem to be too broken up over it and "wreck" is misspelled. If you have the Move DLC I'd suggest using the sticker panel rather than the hologram material to put those mushrooms on. They are hardly visible. Oh good gravy! Not "untolled" it's UNTOLD. So the story comes together at the end. My character comes to the realization that he is search for the elementalis? alright. Did not like being link-knapped in the end. I immediately left the level it took me too. I detest this sort of thing. Overall, pretty good level. The design was nice but could use a little sprucing up in certain areas. The gameplay was ok but could also use some more platforming elements. good work on this.

2012-07-31 15:42:00 Author: biorogue Posts: 8424

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Thanks you two! LOL! I loved both of your reviews!!! XD Made it sound so funny. I'm currently in the progress on making the sequel to it. Been a year since I made that level. I didn't even notice. :o And, oh my gosh! I am so making sure the grammar and the story is very well put together! That is just embarrassing! I will definitively be having BETA testers for the next level! I don't want any thing to go wrong with it. Thank you so much for the very detailed reviews! What levels do I feedback you back you both with? ^_^

2012-08-01 12:51:00 Author: Skaterjoe14 Posts: 60

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