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These levels need a super cleaning... how they got on the list in the state there in I'll never know... I'd be super greatful if anyone could correct all the texts in my levels... grammar, some spellings or making things make more sense is all needed... also I need to fix lots of flaws still lurking around. I would really appreciate some help. Here's all the text in the level. Russias Greatest Three & The EVIL Kleptomaniac Puppet! LittleBig Russia creators are in trouble! A mysterious crafted figure is stealing other creations with no remorse! These three creators need your help! Oh my goodness! This isn't good at all! Oh no, no, no not good at all! What a catastrophe! Oh you poor dear, you alright? is your brain and thinking good? What a mess, and your poor little pod to, ruined. This has that gosh darn Kleptomaniac puppeat written all over this! Please, come inside. He's a dangerous, insane wooden man, hurry. How rude, I havn't introduced myself yet, my names Vladlena Popov, I specialise in crafting vigrant garments and lucious cakes! To fix your pod you'll need to vist Konstantin Ivanov, He's the only creator skilled enough to fix vehicles around here. But first I purpose some refreshments, it's been a while since I'ved had guests, Please exuse the mess. Just make your way past my display, it will take you straight into my kitchen My greatest creation yet! The Kremlim cake! isn't it beautiful? Now, hold tight while I prepare some delights. Then we can get going. It's the Kleptomaniac Puppeat! He's stealing my Kremlim cake! I've spent weeks crafting that masterpiece! Don't wreck my Alexander Nevsky Cathedral cake is Well! Oh that troublesome puppeat... My poor Alexander Cathedral couldn't take the Kletomaniac's magic and gave in... Where's that silly wooden toy gotten to? /i want to give him a piece of my mind! Good heavens! The Kleptomaniac puppeat is heading towards Afanasy Solovyoks home! I know I said we would vist Konstantin Ivanov but right now Afanasy needs our help and fast! Part 2 No! It's all wrong! this is bosh! complete and utter bosh! Why can't I make masterpieces anymore? Who's there? Goaway! I'm busy! What do you want? Can't you see I'm extremely busy with important work? Who's there? Whatever your selling I'm not intrested! Good day to you sir! What do you think you are doing? Get your mucky fingerprints of my beautiful art! Get back here this instant! Oh deary me! It looks like we were too late... it looks like the Kleptomaniac has already striked! That was the kletomaniac puppeat?! That no good wooden puerile stole my precious art and brought to life all the characters in my fanart book! Youre a little old to be drawing fanart... Don't stifle my creativity woman! your house has turned into quite the circus! What can we do to get rid of these pests? This may be a wild plant but I suggest we flood the house! If that mad puppeat brought my art work to live then it should behave like art! My samovar should be enough to wipe these pesks and get rid of the puppeats magic gunk is well... hopefully... The samovar is just in the next room, but our passageway is being blocked by Gorynych! Vladlena! Go vacate our path! Me? What am I suppose to do? He's your creation, yo deal with it! This should hopefully do the trcik! Care to do the honours? Oh thank you! thanks to you my home is back to normal and thanks to your heroric deeds, I have found new inspiration for my art! I think it's your greatest work yet! Now, Vladlena told me about your unfortunate events with the Kleptomaniac, and to show my my gratitdude I insist on giving you a ride to Konstantin Ivanov's base! Things to fix so far I need to fix as many as possible so please help me find more. Part 1 -Visuals on the houses distorted when resized -Cover the first hallway with hologram plasma to avoid unnecessary layer switching -better cam on the first spike jump to avoid cheap death -movable jump pads need gyroscopes -Change coat hangers to be more user friendly to players -R1 sign on the the giant cotten real to direct players to go under instead of over it cursing cheap deaths. -Cut hologram near big real to stop player falling in the wrong layer making the player have to manually retry. -Spike in the far bottom right needed to avoid skipping sections near big cotten reel. -Shifting the bobbins up and down so they won't lift up the movable bounce pad is well. -making it more clear to direct the player to go left after moving the movable bounce pad in place -Hologram needed near the mannequin near the bottom to avoid unnecessary layer switching -Falling cotten reels sometimes stack up on each other -You can faintly see the puppets hands when zooming out to show the Kremlin cake on the far right. -The Kremlin cake lags, focus cam more forward -If you skip Vladlena Popov speech quickly you can see the puppet still trying to reposition himself and slightly drifting off. -The cam on the cake bouncepads needs more focus when jumping down instead of falling. Part 2 -A movie camera to show players entering instead of showing the roof. -Afanasy and Vladlena sometimes clip together not moving into there correct spots -Fix the Russian dolls e.g when a player throws a smaller one back in by mistake they can't emit anymore. -Move the button on the first Russian doll, if hit by mistake then constantly emit and disturbs game play. -Make a direction leading the player to go up instead of trying to attempt to go down the tube straight away. -More hologram along the pillars to avoid unnecessary layer switch. -Add gyroscopes or springs to the large Russian dolls to avoid them tumbling over. -Add a block to jump on the Russian dolls easier instead of using the sculptures base. -Make it so when launching the last bomb it explodes along with the boss instead of hitting a wall. -When being squished while holding the small russian doll makes the books unmovable making the level uncompletable. -When opening the draws to show jump pads, theres a small gap that needs filling in. -Afansy speech appears to early when focused on Gorynch. -A wobble bolt is still visible on Gorynch. -The far right bounce pads will randomly break at times. -Afanasy sometimes gets caught in the fire making the level uncompletable -Afanasy head sometimes shakes heavily when looking at the samovar. Also what can I do to make the experience or generally just the level better? Not many players seem to be making it to part 3 and would like to know if theres any frustrating game play or anything to complicated, I'd appreciate any help.

2011-08-11 17:31:00 Author: LordMagicPants Posts: 187

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Here's your text with the requested changes emphasized: Russia's Greatest Three & The EVIL Kleptomaniac Puppet! LittleBig Russia creators are in trouble! A mysterious crafted figure is stealing other creations with no remorse! These three creators need your help! Oh my goodness! This isn't good at all! Oh no, no, no, not good at all! What a catastrophe! Oh, you poor dear, are you alright? Have you come unstitched? What a mess, and your poor little pod, too. Ruined. This has that gosh darn Kleptomaniac Puppet written all over it! Please, come inside. He's a dangerous, insane wooden man, hurry. How rude, I haven't introduced myself yet. My name's Vladlena Popov, I specialise in crafting vibrant garments and luscious cakes! To fix your pod you'll need to visit Konstantin Ivanov. He's the only creator skilled enough to fix vehicles around here. But first I propose some refreshments. It's been a while since I've had guests, please excuse the mess. Just make your way past my display, it will take you straight into my kitchen. My greatest creation yet! The Kremlim cake! Isn't it beautiful? Now, hold tight while I prepare some delights. Then we can get going. It's the Kleptomaniac Puppet! He's stealing my Kremlim cake! I've spent weeks crafting that masterpiece! Don't wreck my Alexander Nevsky Cathedral cake as well! Oh that troublesome puppet... My poor Alexander Cathedral couldn't take the Kleptomaniac's magic and gave in... Where's that silly wooden toy gotten to? I want to give him a piece of my mind! Good heavens! The Kleptomaniac Puppet is heading towards Afanasy Solovyok's home! I know I said we would visit Konstantin Ivanov but right now Afanasy needs our help and fast! Part 2 No! It's all wrong! This is bosh! Complete and utter bosh! Why can't I make masterpieces anymore? Who's there? Go away! I'm busy! What do you want? Can't you see I'm extremely busy with important work? Who's there? Whatever you're selling, I'm not interested! Good day to you, sir! What do you think you are doing? Get your mucky fingerprints off my beautiful art! Get back here this instant! Oh deary me! It looks like we were too late... the Kleptomaniac has already struck! That was the Kleptomaniac Puppet?! That no good wooden puerile stole my precious art and brought to life all the characters in my fanart book! You're a little old to be drawing fanart... Don't stifle my creativity, woman! Your house has turned into quite the circus! What can we do to get rid of these pests? This may be a wild plan but I suggest we flood the house! If that mad puppet brought my artwork to life then it should behave like art! The hot water from my samovar should be enough to wipe out these pests and get rid of the puppet's magic gunk as well... hopefully... The samovar is just in the next room, but our passageway is being blocked by Gorynych! Vladlena! Go vacate our path! Me? What am I supposed to do? He's your creation, you deal with it! This should hopefully do the trick! Care to do the honours? Oh thank you! Thanks to you my home is back to normal and, as a result of your heroic deeds, I have found new inspiration for my art! I think it's your greatest work yet! Now, Vladlena told me about your unfortunate encounter with the Kleptomaniac. To show my gratitude, I insist on giving you a ride to Konstantin Ivanov's base! I have tried to maintain the voice you have given the characters while fixing only what is necessary. I expanded upon the mention of the samovar a bit because many sackpeople probably do not know what a samovar is. They'll understand hot water cleaning things up, though. These levels are very impressive, as I mentioned to you in the review yesterday. As you probably guessed, I didn't make it to part three because Vladlena died in the fire at the end of part two. Afanasy actually hit the fire and bounced out of it. Lucky guy! I will go back and play to the third part eventually, but if players are stopping early it may be because they haven't the will to redo the first two parts after a sackbot dies. I hope the above text changes are helpful!

2011-08-11 18:41:00 Author: Uncuddly Posts: 237

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Awesome levels, and congrats on your MM Pick! I've donned my grammar hat, proof read your text and tried to tweak it as best I could. Others may have different thoughts on it as well. Warning, extreme pedantry follows Russia's Greatest Three & the EVIL Kleptomaniac Puppet! LittleBig Russia creators are in trouble! A mysterious crafted figure is stealing others' creations with no remorse! These three creators need your help! Oh my goodness! This isn't good at all! Oh no, no, no, not good at all! What a catastrophe! Oh you poor dear, are you alright? Is your brain and thinking good? What a mess! And your poor little pod too; ruined. This has that gosh darn Kleptomaniac Puppet written all over it! Please, come inside. He's a dangerous, insane, wooden man. Hurry! --Note: Capitalised 'Puppet', taking 'Kleptomaniac Puppet' to be its name How rude, I haven't introduced myself yet. My name is Vladlena Popov, I specialise in crafting vibrant garments and luscious cakes! To fix your pod you'll need to visit Konstantin Ivanov. He's the only creator skilled enough to fix vehicles around here. But first I propose some refreshments! It's been a while since I've had guests, so please excuse the mess. Just make your way past my display, it will take you straight into my kitchen. My greatest creation yet! The Kremlim cake! isn't it beautiful? --Note: Kremlim? (Kremlin?) Now, hold tight while I prepare some delights. Then we can get going. It's the Kleptomaniac Puppet! He's stealing my Kremlim cake! I've spent weeks crafting that masterpiece! Don't wreck my Alexander Nevsky Cathedral cake as well! --Note: Kremlim? (Kremlin?) (again) Oh, that troublesome puppet! My poor Alexander Cathedral couldn't take the Kleptomaniac's magic and gave in... Where's that silly wooden toy gotten to? I want to give him a piece of my mind! Good heavens! The Kleptomaniac Puppet is heading towards Afanasy Solovyok's home! I know I said we would visit Konstantin Ivanov, but right now Afanasy needs our help, and fast! Part 2 No! It's all wrong! This is bosh! Complete and utter bosh! Why can't I make masterpieces any more? Who's there? Go away! I'm busy! What do you want? Can't you see I'm extremely busy with important work? Who's there? Whatever you're selling, I'm not interested! Good day to you sir! What do you think you're doing? Get your mucky fingerprints off my beautiful art! Get back here this instant! Oh deary me! It looks like we're too late. The Kleptomaniac has already struck! That was the Kleptomaniac Puppet?! That no good wooden puerile stole my precious art and brought to life all the characters in my fanart book! --Note: puerile isn't a noun as far as I know, you should choose a different term there You're a little old to be drawing fan art... Don't stifle my creativity woman! Your house has turned into quite the circus! What can we do to get rid of these pests? This may be a wild plan, but I suggest we flood the house! If that mad puppet brought my art work to life then it should behave like art! My samovar should be enough to wipe out these pests and get rid of the puppet's magic gunk as well... hopefully... The samovar is just in the next room, but our passageway is being blocked by Gorynych! Vladlena! Go and vacate our path! Me? What am I supposed to do? He's your creation, you deal with it! Hopefully this should do the trick! Care to do the honours? Oh thank you! Thanks to you and your heroic deeds, my home is back to normal and I have found new inspiration for my art! I think it's your greatest work yet! Now, Vladlena told me about your unfortunate events with the Kleptomaniac, and to show my gratitude I insist on giving you a ride to Konstantin Ivanov's base! Edit: Beaten to the punch. You have a couple of opinions now.

2011-08-11 18:44:00 Author: Dr C Posts: 122

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Sorry to be a ninja. I was curious about the Kremlim vs. Kremlin bit as well. I wondered if it was intentional since "Kremlim" sounds tastier where cake is concerned. Probably because the "m" is more evocative of cream. Creamy Kremlims, mmm! It's probably smarter to mention it in the reply, though.

2011-08-11 19:05:00 Author: Uncuddly Posts: 237

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I'm certain that it's supposed to be Kremlin, given what I could find in three seconds (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Moscow_Kremlin) Played the level earlier, it's lovely to look at and some of the puzzles are inspired, but I ran into the glitch where I beat Gorynch and couldn't progress, presumably because Afanasy had perished. Personally not sure what can be done to fix that, perhaps alter the timing and behaviour of the sackbot? I'm sure a logic expert could recommend something.

2011-08-11 19:13:00 Author: Vector-Espio-Fan Posts: 119

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Also, not to spam the thread, I think "puerile" is pretty reasonable as an adjectival noun. It's a bit like "feeding the hungry": hungry obviously isn't a noun but it works well enough in that situation. It seems consistent with Afanasy's character that he might use an adjective in this manner.

2011-08-11 19:22:00 Author: Uncuddly Posts: 237

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Puerile? That's a perfectly good adjective. The definition I've come to know is here (http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/puerile). As a noun...eh, not so sure. But I think you should keep it in there in some form, it suits the character more. Edit: How about "puerile evil-doer"? Too lame? Thought so...

2011-08-11 19:26:00 Author: Vector-Espio-Fan Posts: 119

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Just want to express in words that I'm mightily impressed with Uncuddly's thorough and well-presented corrections in the #2 post. Speaking as a proofreader and translator!

2011-08-12 03:30:00 Author: Unknown User

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Yayy! thank you Uncuddly and Dr C for the fantastic help and for being awesome! Part 1 was less painful then I thought and is now super polished! Part 2... bit fiddly but so far stopped the clogging up on the Russian dolls! I'll publish both when completed and will carry on with part 3.

2011-08-12 11:04:00 Author: LordMagicPants Posts: 187

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