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I've published my first level and would really like some feedback on it. I know that it is short, so telling me that won't be terribly useful. Other than that I'd appreciate any feedback that helps me make my next level that much better. Since I'm new here to the forums I don't want to over-commit, so I'll commit to providing in-kind feedback for the first five respondants. Thank you all so much in advance for helping me to make better content. http://lbp.me/v/wgvprt

2011-01-11 21:13:00 Author: Max_Coffeebreath Posts: 6

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here's my review! hope you find it helpful +first of all this looks good for a first level! it's obvious that you tried to make it look good which is something most first timers fail to do -the use of story mode/popular online level prizes in your levels is kind of frowned upon. some people make them fit in well but it usually is pretty obvious and kind of makes it feel less like your creation since you're using other people's pieces. -the tree jumping after the giraffes is kind of annoying. i'd space it better if i were you -the tree with the lemurs seems a bit blocky. you could easily clean it up with the corner edit tool and make it look much more natural. the corner editor should be your best friend when creating custom objects like this tree -i think you should make it so you have to bring meat or something to the cheetahs before they will give you a ride. it doesnt make sense that they just let your ride on their backs -two of my cheetahs froze in midair above the hippo and sank +nice looking geese. -i think you should put a camera at the exit of the zoo so you can see the top of the arc where you have the elephant decoration +i like the "don't heart free costume levels" sign. i might add those to my levels for F4F please play ginormo burger and tell me what you think. thanks!

2011-01-12 18:13:00 Author: harbingernaut Posts: 126

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Thanks for the great feedback. The cheetahs freezing is a new one on me. I'll look into it. Anyone else reviewing please tell me if this happens to you as well. The other negatives are things that I know I can fix, I'll get started on that this weekend. I won't be home tonight until quite late so not sure if I'll be online tonight. If I don't get you feedback tonight then I definitely will tomorrow.

2011-01-12 23:34:00 Author: Max_Coffeebreath Posts: 6

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@harbingernaut RE: Ginormo Burger Feedback Moved the feedback to your thread. Sorry, my first time using the forum.

2011-01-13 09:50:00 Author: Max_Coffeebreath Posts: 6

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Just played this level, it is a funny idea, although there lacks and danger in the level. You could add a few parts you are running from secondary sampedes that he caused. The ground is all level, but I figured that may be because of the elephant having to move, but if you don't need it to be flat, I would add some level like zoos have, parts where you walk above the tiget pit, you could still have the fence knocked down, but the player would have to take the side path not to be eaten. The humor was funny, the signs could be tweaked more to look like a zoo. I know it will take more time, but pics of each animal on the sign and then have a thin invisible bit of grabby material on the floor at each sign set off the names, or just have it prox triggered. You could add more of them jumping out with a zoom in and a noise, also the water appears weirdly when you are on the trees, maybe find a better transistion for it or just have it on the whole time. Your level may look better with a solid sky blue back ground, but maybe not, the fence on that background does kind of fit. A bat cave or a nocturnal house was missing (love those in the zoos), not needed, but may be fun to throw in if you can. All in all funny good little level, more interaction may make it even better, monkeys actually moving, vines on the trees, tiger attacking. polar bears with some ice parts? THe pipe object of the fence was a neat idea, but I did wonder if a handmade greay metal bar fence would look better, and take up less thermo. Great job on a first level. I could use F4F on any of my levels, so just pick one, but you may like to give me feedback on the OK Space Invasio level because it has some of the same kind of humor and dynamics.

2011-01-14 08:19:00 Author: celsus Posts: 822

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Feeback Time! For a first level you have a good foundation as a creator. Your level had good structure and the story was kept up throughout. Also the story was kinda funny which kept me entertained too. I loved how your animals (the ones you made) were made. I also like your trees and the platforming to get across the croc pit. Something I think you need to work on is design. It kinda didnt look like a zoo at firs because of the cages. i like your use of that item as cage bars but there were no roofs or floors to the cages. Also what was the dark matter in the beginning supposed to be? To improve on your level you could also add some platforming based on whats at real zoos like jumping from cage to cage or swinging through trees from a forest exibit. Overall not bad for a first try. Just take your time crafting things and i think you'll be fine. I guess I'll be seeing you in lbp2?

2011-01-15 01:01:00 Author: L1GhTmArE Posts: 519

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A good, fun level. Much better than most people first attempts. Next time around, I'd use less Mm objects though! Who made the geese by the way? They were really great!

2011-01-15 12:24:00 Author: chimpskylark Posts: 335

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