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Hi I'm new and I wanted to post a scary story I made for Halloween even though it has pasted. Comments and questions are appreciated. Please rate from 1 to 10. I Am Error ?AAAAAAAWWWWHHHHH YEAH!? roared the crowd, ?This party is awesome!? I gazed out over the crowd, investigating the activities of the individual people. Such unenlightened and parochial minds they are. Still their presence benefits my own knowledge. Suddenly, a girl that I've never seen before walked up to me. ?Bonjour, I?m John,? I greeted. ?Well it seems you?re having as much fun as the rest of us John,? the tall girl replied sarcastically. ?I?m Clara,? Clara announced. ?It's about time someone had the audacity to talk to me,? I joked. ?Well you looked as if you had a pragmatic mind,? Clara acknowledged. ?Those are some big words you are trying to use but, they are not as long as pneumonoultramicroscopicsilicovolcanoconiosis,? I remarked. Clara responded, ?Neither of which are as long as the chemical name for titin.? I replied, ?You have a worthy intellectual brain that rivals even my own but.? KNONCK-KNOCK-KNOCK! A loud noise rang through my ears. ?Did you hear that?!? I screamed. ?No,? Clara responded, ?Are you OK?? ?Sorry, I have to go check it out,? I panicked. A group of people watched as I scurried across the hall. Once I reached the door a voice called out to me in a deep and lifeless tone, ?Open the door.? Even though I was scared, I opened the backyard door just to find a bloody knife. As I closed the door the lights went out. A loud shriek of terror filled the house. AAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHH! It was nearly pitch black with the light of the moon glowing incandescently through the windows. I tried to leave the house but the backyard door was suspiciously locked. I continued searching the house for another exit while listening to the muffled screams and bumping into other people. I progressed with my scrutiny for what was going on and for an exit. I found the front door but it was also locked. I contemplated on what to do next but slipped on something wet. The lights turned on and there was a trail of blood on the ground. There were body parts and blood everywhere. I heard a voice that sounded like Clara and ran towards it. She was in the kitchen with her body spread across the floor. She had several stab marks on her body. Who could have done this? As I walked out of the house with the doors mysteriously unlocked, there was a squad of glowing red and blue cars. The police got out. They ordered, ?Put down your weapon!? All of a sudden there was a bloody knife in my hand. ?How did that get there?!? I questioned. I flung the knife at one of the policeman?s neck and barricaded the door so that the others couldn?t get in. I can?t be the killer if I was running from him. There must be some error. That only goes to show that acting crazy and going insane are two different things. One is when you?re in control and the other is when your not. The police blasted through the door and began to fire. It is not meant to be so scary but it is supposed to be weird or strange.thx.

2010-11-11 05:19:00 Author: Milonster Posts: 2

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Wow that was a really dramatic twist. I like it. Had me engaged. Interesting opening but once it got going was way better. Would be a cool idea to flesh out in LBP2. Kinda on the creepy side but cool though

2010-11-11 21:47:00 Author: bmoney2310 Posts: 187

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Cool story Milon! I like It I didn't know you were a Story writing person. But you sure are good at It I'd give It a 10!

2010-11-16 11:37:00 Author: Unknown User

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