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the sand journals

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the sand journalsbeasty23jk
to survive the desert you need :water, strength,and wits. am i forgetting anything? it is the story of and unlucky sackboy who gotr trapped in the desert. needs to survive long enough to get to the village on the map!
me and my friend were working on this for about 3 months.		2010-08-09 23:03:00

Author:
lbp is awespme
Posts: 657

me and my friend were working on this for about 3 months.

!O.O! 3 MONTHS!!!
I don't think it takes more than one and a half months to complete any level.		2010-08-09 23:24:00

Author:
ConverseFox
Posts: 2333

we can get grounded2010-08-09 23:27:00

Author:
lbp is awespme
Posts: 657

Well,in my opinion this is your best level.You could have used a couple of SFX so it could feel more alive.The music fat in l guess (fat in?).Decorations...at least you used some cacti,but you could have used more stickers and better corner editing cause it looked kinda plain.The story was entertaining...l liked the journal thingy.You should pay more attention to your grammar (cash only).So yeah it's too short and l can't belive you took 3 months to finish this.How many times did you get grounded?2010-08-10 00:00:00

Author:
Balgarino
Posts: 377

too many!!!2010-08-10 02:46:00

Author:
lbp is awespme
Posts: 657

Well,that explains everything!!!(l think).And according to my calculations (2+2=pie) you only took two week to make this level,if i'm wrong then l'll be hit by a giant log.Maybe someday you will do an awesome level just keep trying and don't give up.Btw F4F my level Apocalypse:Rising.l finished it in one week cause l wanted to publish my first level fast,but l had my reasons.2010-08-10 03:18:00

Author:
Balgarino
Posts: 377

well i need to have it rated on a scale of 1-6 6th being a heart2010-08-10 03:20:00

Author:
lbp is awespme
Posts: 657

also get hit by a small log a week and two hours i journal when i play2010-08-10 03:25:00

Author:
lbp is awespme
Posts: 657

Hi, lbp is awespme! I like your level, but I could not finish it. I found the well but could not understand what I need to do next. Can you give some hint?2010-08-10 12:58:00

Author:
Domik12
Posts: 838

Congrats - you at least made a level that was playable.

Still need LOTS of work on your corner editing and grammar, but aside from that good job.
Three stars.		2010-08-10 14:04:00

Author:
Voltergeist
Posts: 1702

thanks you think it is good and domik12 jump down the well and find the piece of stone get on it and up you go. . i think you know wat i mean.2010-08-10 15:23:00

Author:
lbp is awespme
Posts: 657

oh and if you were forced fdor work to go into the desert with nothing but the cloths on your back would you have time for grammar ion a journal for your boss?2010-08-10 15:24:00

Author:
lbp is awespme
Posts: 657

fdor? Anyways, if I was in the desert, I'd pay attention to grammar to keep my mind occupied. I guess I should play this first, though. By the way, capital letters can make a title very attractive, so you'll get more plays.2010-08-10 17:41:00

Author:
HappyGreenCactus
Posts: 247

Defiantly the best level you have made yet. I rated it 3 stars. It could have used a lot more decorations. :/2010-08-10 18:29:00

Author:
ConverseFox
Posts: 2333

This is your best level by far, I'm glad to see you know what the corner editing tool does, but it'd be nice to see some more of it. As cory has said, it could use a LOT more decorations, and the story was very blotchy. Misspellings everywhere and very unclear. I was walking in a cave, killed something you never explained, got some sort of oracle that didn't seem to do anything, then went in a well that I guess "shooted" me up to death...? Yeah. I didn't quite understand it. Just add some more corner editing to make it really look like dunes then a clearer story, then you got yourself a good level. :star::star:2010-08-10 18:38:00

Author:
anoken
Posts: 1654

Hey lbp, this level has some interesting ideas. However it could have used a little more time in the oven. As others have said the level is a bit sparse, adding a few details and some erxtra corner corner editing would go a long way in fleshing out your environment. Once you finish a level it's a good idea to go through it a few more times and add some details. As far is game play goes, it seems to me you're trying to do too much in a short span of time. You tell the player to search for water only to have them find it a second later. You should put some obstacles up for the player to overcome to get to the goal. Also there are few places where the player can fall out of your level or get trapped.


I can see improvement with every level you post so keep up the good work.


Sorry was typing from my phone and it submitted on its own.		2010-08-10 21:05:00

Author:
Xenon
Posts: 306

its allright man.2010-08-10 21:20:00

Author:
lbp is awespme
Posts: 657

Hey Awpsome, by NO means do I like your level. You need a LOT of improvement still. Seriously.

Also, LOL @ not having time to use good grammar. Worst. Excuse. Ever.		2010-08-10 21:37:00

Author:
Voltergeist
Posts: 1702

I played this and there is not much more I can say that has not be said already. The level needs a lot more work though there was some good scenery that I liked and I liked the little Journal entries which I thought added to the depth story. Though there are some pretty rough parts of the level design. There is a part early one where I got stuck and had to kill myself due to bad corner editing and yeah there are lots of misspellings. I liked the idea of having to find a path to the odd village in the sky and there are some really interesting ideas but you need to devot a little bit more time and thought in the level to fully flesh it out.2010-08-11 04:16:00

Author:
arklon
Posts: 33

ya i have heard 2010-08-13 00:12:00

Author:
lbp is awespme
Posts: 657

Hey awespme!

Per request, here are a few pictures of your level:


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http://i900.photobucket.com/albums/ac207/tross13/Levels/sand%20journals/2010-08-21-118.png		2010-08-22 15:07:00

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Taffey
Posts: 3187


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