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| Hi there, In two weeks I'll be sending out query letters to literary agents for representation. I've been working on a middle grade fantasy novel that I'm interested in getting published. Do you guys mind giving me your opinions on the letter I have so far? You can take a peek at it below. Thank you in advance. ---------------------------- The 200 billion live among us. They crawl underneath us. They hover over us. And when we are gone, still, they will remain. However, the mindless mass has one weakness?mortality. THERE ARE NO GODS FOR ARTHROPODS is a middle grade anthropomorphic fantasy about insects. The novel is complete at 70,000 words. The human race has disappeared and discarded the world as a leftover. But in their absence, it is the insects that emerge and form an interdependent society. It's Fig?s first day as an adult and because of his short life one of the last twenty-seven days he will live. After a near death experience, Fig is confronted with his own fleeting fate. He crosses paths with the nihilistic Fly King who offers Fig a chance?the possibility of eternal life. With the help of a crew of bug bunglers and his only clue being a mysterious armoire, Fig must wander through the bizarre realm outside of the Sourwood which will reveal a truth the Fly King has been hiding for over 300 years. THERE ARE NO GODS FOR ARTHROPODS would appeal to readers of dystopian allegories. The story is a slight homage to Lewis Carroll?s Alice and Wonderland and much of the events are inspired by the historical Crusades. Through his journey Fig learns the fallibility of fundamentalism and that accepting death is the only way to truly learn how to live. Enclosed please find a SASE for your reply and consideration. Kind Regards, | 2009-11-19 19:57:00 Author: pantspantspants  Posts: 189 |
| Well, I'm sure you're the expert, and not me, but since you are trying to appear as professional as possible (per my assumption), I might add a few commas in the designated places of the following line: It's Fig?s first day as an adult and[comma] because of his short life[comma] one of the last twenty-seven days he will live. At least considering I read that correctly. ----- I wish you the best of luck. Keep us posted. | 2009-11-19 22:40:00 Author: comphermc  Posts: 5338 |
| lol! Good suggestions comp. I'd hate for my query to be grammatically lacking. Does anyone have suggestions on how the letter sounds? If you read it would it pique your interest? | 2009-11-20 00:07:00 Author: pantspantspants Posts: 189 |
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