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Human body-The inside job

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Hey everyone! I literally just published my new level Human body-The inside job and it would be great if i could get some feedback on it.The doctor cannot figure out what is wrong with this patient.So it is up to you, sackboy, to explore his body inside and out to find what is making him sick! I have worked on this literally for a couple months trying to make it as polished and good as possible so give it a try! Sorry for the quality, i just took them with my phone lol.http://www.lbpcentral.com/forums/attachment.php?attachmentid=504&stc=1&d=1241957494http://www.lbpcentral.com/forums/attachment.php?attachmentid=503&stc=1&d=12419574692009-05-10 04:36:00

Author:
Jrange378
Posts: 573

You should try and post pics to try and entice people to play your level. Also post clearly your PSN and the title of your level. Is it just called The Human Body? It wasn't very clear.2009-05-10 06:26:00

Author:
Sosaku
Posts: 146

Ill try to get some pictures up then. PSN is Jrange 378 if you didnt see it under my name.2009-05-10 12:25:00

Author:
Jrange378
Posts: 573

I just finished playing doctor, and here are my thoughts.

I like how you used little score bubbles as infection areas, it conveys the idea that you're getting rid of the infections.
Nice use of colors too.

I did run into a few problems...

Let me know if I missed something, but I wasn't sure what was going on to the left of the starting point. What's the checkpoint for?
In two different areas I fell through the level: behind the left lung, and near the egg-grabbing puzzle.
The "chromocoaster" seemed to have left without me before I had the chance to grab on to it. Was that it at the end of the tracks?

You should go through and clean up some of these different areas and let me know when you're done. (either PM me here in the LBPC or on the PS3, I may forget to check back here)
I'll be glad to try it again for you.
Two stars for now though...		2009-05-11 02:57:00

Author:
skumchunk
Posts: 57

So the gas isnt big enough in some areas? And the rollercoaster is completely my fault, i have been republishing it and then i noticed i published it again without the pod thing at the start of the dna strand as you said. This has already been fixed. Ill fix those areas to prevent falling, Thanks!2009-05-11 11:18:00

Author:
Jrange378
Posts: 573

First of all, I haven't seen another level quite like this, the whole concept is genius. From the start i liked the fact you can fly up his nose and also that you can pull out the rotten teeth. Also, the ride out through the porcelain express was funny, and the music when you flush was pretty funny too. And the reference to the movie osmosis jones, not sure many people would get that, but I still liked it.
The problems i encountered were as follows:
-In the lungs I didn't quite get what I was supposed to be doing, does this even affect the rest of the level?
-The bones you had to swing across were a touch difficult, kept dying here, perhaps you should make them less cumbersome and slightly higher up so they swing more easily and swing you closer to the higher path? As I kept falling down as I let go...
-The red blood cells disappeared after i grabbed them occasionally, so make their lifetime a bit longer perhaps?

So just a bit of tweaking here and there, perhaps with some clearer direction and this will be a pretty good level.
As it stands, I gave it 4 stars, can't remember what tag I stuck to it even though I just played it...		2009-05-11 12:14:00

Author:
Unknown User

Hey Jrange 378!
Just finished playing your level, some feedback...

+ Love the graphic style, everthing is very well made.
+ Fun story with humor
+ Fun to play
+ I loved your first obstacle (with the bad teeth) but it wasn't clear to me those blue things underneath his teeth were bubbles. Also, there's a jetpack but actually you don't need one, you can perfectly remove his teeth and catch the bubbles without the jetpack.

- I felt several times like other people (the lungs was one of them). Seems like they are some holes in your design.
- at the egg area there's a hole on your top right, you can go through there when you fall down you are in nomansland... maybe you should just close that part
- at certain area's it wasn't very clear to me what you are supposed to do. (lungs for example) took me a while to figure that out, maybe you should add some speech bubbles or hints.
- At the last obstacle (the big one that makes the person sick) it wasn't very clear to me where i should go (or maybe that was your intention?) maybe that area needs to be zoomed out to make it a bit easier.
- the bathroom could use some decoration, it looks a bit empty compared to the rest of the level.

i enjoyed playing this level, but would like to see some problems fixed (like the holes where you fall through for example)

misty.		2009-05-11 17:18:00

Author:
Mother-Misty
Posts: 574

Thanks for all the helpful feedback! I have added some things from the feedback you gave.

-Added speech bubbles to make things more clear in areas, as well as why you do them.
-Made the bones easier to swing on.
-Increased the lifetime of the blood cells.
-Did an overhaul on the chromocoaster ride, it will be there when you get there guaranteed and if you fall out i have a checkpoint in it so you can just continue.

Mother-misty- In the egg area, i am unable to close the top right part because it wont let me put material that close to the wall, ive tried.I put gas there though, so you cant fall out.

Scumchunk- To the left of the start is the doctor, he is there holding the thermometer that you walk on.		2009-05-13 00:01:00

Author:
Jrange378
Posts: 573

I had no idea how to get past the "down the throat" part2009-05-13 00:16:00

Author:
ZipCity
Posts: 208

Land on the mouth then change planes by pressing down and x2009-05-13 01:51:00

Author:
Jrange378
Posts: 573

I found this on cool levels and remembered your thread here so I played it. And it was very enjoyable. Nicely made, good use of material and generally just pretty fun

Pros:
+Nice material choices
+The size of everything was pretty good
+Going out "in his dinner"
+Some nice ideas
+Well executed design

Cons:
-Lots of visible things that should have been - Dark matter, edges of level and being able to see out of the body........
-The turning section at the beginning got stuck for a bit		2009-05-14 20:18:00

Author:
Coxy224
Posts: 2645

Some updates have been made for various reasons:

-Added a stomach section as an extra

-The blood the comes out of the parasite has been changed to green goo because my level had gotten modded and i assume that is the reason thats to some helpful users on this board

-Made a short time fix to the people not making the jump onto the "escape pod" There is now a little bridge instead of a jump.There will eventually just be a respawnable ride out though.

Ill get to the feedback on your levels shortly.		2009-05-17 21:36:00

Author:
Jrange378
Posts: 573

I just Played this and i really enjoyed being grossed out by it lol.

The Character designs were cartoony and funny looking and it really suited the concept of the level. I also like having been able to collect points out of the Icky! stuff like going inside the nose that sneeze out point bubbles and getting points from taking a bad tooth from a cavity.

The main objective was to get the person better from his illness and it really felt like youve done it with the minigames youve added inside the persons body.

This level reminds me of Veins only this one does a better job at entertaining the players.

I did notice a few things like sound objects and switches that are supposed to be hidden (Well the switches may have been left like so in purpose to help the player out) but i think adding magic mouths for instructions would do better.

Overall the level was great and i gave it 4 stars and funky and a heart!

Id like some feedback for the level in my sig, preferably "The Count.... Prologue"

Thanks!

Edit: I would use an emitter to emit those bubbles out of the nose to make it seem like the person really sneezed out a big one.		2009-05-18 01:04:00

Author:
graygoose
Posts: 371

Graygoose- Thats how its always been, i might add actual snot coming out as well.
Mother-misty- The jetpack is needed to go in the nose.

Some more updates:

-Made some things invisible
-Put in some speech bubbles to make things more clear.
-closed up a previously level breaking space.
-Also cleared out some therm space.

Overall my level has improved by leaps and bounds thanks to feedback from you guys, thanks!		2009-05-25 05:07:00

Author:
Jrange378
Posts: 573

I just played your level. Nice idea. Heres what I thought.

+ Liked the visuals inside the actual body although I was'nt to keen on the start section.
+ Nice use of the three layers for detail
+ I'm no doctor, nor have I seen anyones insides but it looked a fairly good representation
+ Liked the way you used the different body sections as your platforming sections
+ Lol at the chromocoaster, nice name and idea
+ Nice characters
+ Lol at the way out of the body, I sort of expected it but it was funny none the less, "what I have been eating! Flush It!!"
+ Liked the scoreboard.

- In the left lung, set the piston to directional, as it is now it moves in and out and triggers the task complete sound over and over
- No clear indication of what I was supposed to be doing in the lungs.
- Mag switch visable at the heart
- There are some very open and bland areas, compared to the rest of the detailed section is looks a little odd, theres very little telling you where you go here either, this was just before the worm I think it was??

I enjoyed the level although thought some bits werent quite as polished as others, I also wondered why you need feedback with 14000 plays!!!

**** and "great" tag left		2009-05-25 19:01:00

Author:
GruntosUK
Posts: 1754

As Grantos says I'm not sure you need feedback with all those plays. I'd be more than happy and consider that great feedback in itself.

Anyway I can't add anything different to what has been said already. It was confusing in places still and i was never really sure if i was supposed to go left or right, especially at the end after flushing.

Also at the coaster part I jumped in it and when it went I was hanging on the outside.

The most frustrating part was as mentioned by R25Raw with the 2 bones ( although i didn't realise they were bones ). They were very difficult to move and get swinging.

I'm sure there were still a few switches and things visible too but I couldn't say exactly where. I just remember seeing some.

Great fun level overall though and very nicely put together.		2009-05-27 01:29:00

Author:
mistervista
Posts: 2210

Even though a level has a lot of plays doesnt mean its flawless, and seeing as how this is my first level, i still need people to give me advice.
Grantosuk- I didnt mean to make that part an open area. I was going to have a vertical chase scene that lead to that worm, being a boss. Sadly i ran out of therm and made the worm for show.

Some more updates
-No switches are visible anymore
-changed left lung piston to directional, thanks.
-Lots more bubbles and fixed breakable scoreboard.

Thanks for pointing out some things, couple more feedback and im going full blast into my new secret level!!!		2009-05-27 04:06:00

Author:
Jrange378
Posts: 573

ye this idea is brilliant i would have never thought of this well done i will play it later and then get back to you if good i will tell my freinds about it well done.2009-10-22 08:42:00

Author:
lbpholic
Posts: 1304

returning 4f4:

Overall this level was very orginal. I never really played something like this although at one time had a likewise idea. It looks pretty okay and plays nicely but there are some minor design errors which you have to fix.

I'm not going to sum them up again, the're already mentioned in the post above mine.

You did a good job on this level, but I would suggest doing a re-make and making it even more impressive visually		2010-03-25 19:22:00

Author:
nightwing
Posts: 422

Aggggh, how do i change my sig? I dont want feedback on this level as it dates back from early 09' XD Thanks anyways lol.

EDIT- Found it.		2010-03-25 19:43:00

Author:
Jrange378
Posts: 573


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