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Wrote this a year or two ago. Might want to develop it someday, as with my other series. Both are sci-fi, though this is thousands of years into the future, not hundreds, and rarely involves earth at all. The supernatural also does not exist in this series. Tell me what you think. Derek saw 3 Blacksun Stalkers approaching the ridge he was camped on, oblivious to his presence on the moonlit rocks. The Stalkers wore suits, a combination of a Gear suit and combat suit, if anything they looked like spec-op stealth troops, but he knew they were far more dangerous. Slowly unpacking his Gear M4 Particle Precision Rifle, or the GM4PP Rifle, he laid it on the ground in front and took aim. He had to take them all out before they got out a distress call, or his squad would be neck deep in Blacksun troops within an hour. The response time from their nearby base was quick, at around 30 minutes, but it would take them considerably longer to prepare the proper troops, and sweep the area completely. Derek?s mission brief sounded simple, his squad would penetrate behind the Blacksun front and destroy a support installation, responsible for supplying and refitting troops. But one thing he hadn?t expected was for the enemy to have shielded Gear Frames. His squad was the best, of the best 16 highly trained soldiers, 4 in Gear Frames, including himself. They were disciplined, skilled, and loyal to his command. But they were designed for stealth, not combat. When he ordered an ambush on a squad of 8 gear frames headed towards the front lines, an entire Blacksun Gear squad, they had been surprised. His command was excellent, his intel was not. The shots annihilated 6 of the frames, but 2 were unharmed, the shots bouncing harmlessly off their kinetic shields. They hadn?t been prepared for those, and if he hadn?t acted quickly, those two gears would?ve pasted his squad without a problem. They fired wildly, he had positioned his troops well, but 5 of his troops were killed, 1 Gear Frame destroyed, and another few were injured. He was glad to have brought the GM4PP Rifle with him, it hadn?t been one of the AI recommended mission weapons, but a feeling in his gut told him to be prepared, and it always paid off. In the end, the prototype annihilated the Gears, but the damage to his squad was done. Remaining with him were 6 troops, 3 in gears, with the injured and a couple of escorts retreating to the closest base, as they would only slow them down if they stayed in the field. This left him with about half of his original squad strength, but still more than enough to do the job. He would report the shielded Gear activity upon his return, for now, he had a mission to complete. More Stalkers guarded the support installation, though they were at a small camp nearly as a mile away when Derek finally reached it. These, however, were grunts, and if any were shielded, he was prepared. Against his gun, their Stalker suits were useless as protection. He took aim at all 3 that were outside the base, in turn, switching between them until he was sure of his timing, then opened fire, the shots making a loud ?whoosh? sound as they fired. They were silenced enough that nobody at the installation, a mile away, would hear it. Within 3 seconds, 3 Stalkers were dpwm, nowhere near enough time to call in the attack. Random patrols such as these were not prepared for attacks when defending areas behind the front. The lack of discipline made Derek sick. ?Squad, move up, staggered formation, I?ll take point.? Derek barked over the squad channel. Almost instantly, green lights flashed in his HUD, one for each member of the squad, indicating confirmation of the order. The installation was around a mile away, located in a well defended valley. Or so thought the defenders, which explained why there were no more farther patrols as they approached. As they neared, Derek gave the signal to hold position. Jacob, a pre-war friend of his, chimed in over the radio, ?looks like we caught them with their pants down, ******** don't even have any other patrols.? Derek knew it was a foolish assumption, and let him know just that, ?B2, those Gears took out half our squad, and this is the only place they could?ve come from. Their primary bases wouldn?t have front-line equipment, those were prototypes?and if our luck doesn?t hold, we could have more of those things in there. Stay frosty, move in! Blitzkrieg formation, wipe them out before they have a chance to react!? As ordered, his squad moved in, using stealth until they were within range, and then opening fire, lighting up the base with explosive shells from Derek's Gear Frames, quickly destroying the barracks and garage. The few enemies left alive after the lightning-fast attack were unprotected Stalkers, and they were gunned down in moments. His squad had succeeded, the installation was secured. One structure in the back of the base caught his attention as he scanned the carnage, something that hadn?t been in reports as a common Blacksun structure. ?Hold fire on the far structure, we have no idea what?s inside and it could be anything. Keep your eyes peeled and surround it, B3 take recon, the rest of you on me,? ordered Derek. As they approached, B3 opened a private transmission to him, ?sir, come take a look at this, I don't know what it is?but it looks like?just take a look sir,? she said. Her voice sounded shaky, and he knew that wasn?t a good sign, almost nothing could spook Cassie. He opened the doors to the silo, and inside was something he dreaded to see. Before him stood a Federation Gear Annihilator, the largest Gear ever constructed. At nearly 40 feet tall, it had enough firepower to level a small army in minutes. But there hadn?t been Federation activity in the area for years, ever since the Rebellion. He knew who was supplying the rebels with supplies, and the Alliance had a whole new set of problems. Opening the squad channel, he gave his thoughts, ?you all know what this is, so I?ll spare you the explanation. If the Federation is supplying these guys, this is the same as an act of war. We need to report this?while we?re at it, B3, see if you can get that thing running. We could use the firepower.

2009-04-19 06:53:00 Author: Echonian Posts: 279

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Let me be the first to say: wow. Nice story, if the sci-fi names (Gear M4 Particle Precision Rifle) were a bit corny. The intrigue is great, I would love it if you continued this! Good job on writing it, it's very well constructed. NB: Add the paragraph separation you have here to your other story please. It makes it a lot easier to read

2009-04-19 10:15:00 Author: dawesbr Posts: 3280

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Yes, well, I realized the names were corny at one point. Then again, I want people to understand what a weapon is through the name without me having to explain it too much farther. Other weapons would have shorter names, that thing was a prototype weapon. Thanks again. I already have a bit of a backround for this universe, so it might be easier to write for than my other one. Truth be told, though, I'm more interested in the other story than in this one, by a lot.

2009-04-19 17:33:00 Author: Echonian Posts: 279

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Discontinuing work on this series until I have my other one fully outlined. So possibly for longer than I'm a member of these forums, amazing as they are.

2009-04-20 23:56:00 Author: Echonian Posts: 279

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